tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4360180349627835631.post1639241797807277358..comments2012-06-23T07:57:43.939+08:00Comments on 2011 S2-01 English Language Blog: EL blogging - Soh FanPatricia_Nghttp://www.blogger.com/profile/01038578427749303616noreply@blogger.comBlogger6125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4360180349627835631.post-37510241832186893272011-07-08T11:53:27.065+08:002011-07-08T11:53:27.065+08:00Your essay is organized, but lacks an introduction...Your essay is organized, but lacks an introduction and conclusion. However, the body of information is very comprehensive and you elaborated much. You also shared your thoughts and feelings about the various issues, but you could have given some examples on helping the person suffering from the depression. It would be better if you included thesis statements and topic sentences. Overall, nice piece of writing :)ShamusSengTheGreathttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18400087656579188142noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4360180349627835631.post-26533535937788186772011-07-08T11:53:15.862+08:002011-07-08T11:53:15.862+08:00This comment has been removed by the author.ShamusSengTheGreathttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18400087656579188142noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4360180349627835631.post-80437483947610662202011-07-08T11:52:58.044+08:002011-07-08T11:52:58.044+08:00This comment has been removed by the author.ShamusSengTheGreathttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18400087656579188142noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4360180349627835631.post-25958511284859098342011-07-08T11:51:48.570+08:002011-07-08T11:51:48.570+08:00This comment has been removed by the author.ShamusSengTheGreathttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18400087656579188142noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4360180349627835631.post-92100675886056194462011-07-08T11:44:44.374+08:002011-07-08T11:44:44.374+08:00This comment has been removed by the author.ShamusSengTheGreathttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18400087656579188142noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4360180349627835631.post-18470505193738960672011-07-08T11:42:49.417+08:002011-07-08T11:42:49.417+08:00This comment has been removed by the author.ShamusSengTheGreathttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18400087656579188142noreply@blogger.com